Carpe Diem -Tree of life

echoes bouncing off

buried remains take shape

sounding the depths

Or…..

echoes bouncing off buried remains take shape

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  1. aloha Nicole. i like this. i particularly like this as the one line ku over breaking it into the three line ku. (that’s just imo tho). i also like what happens when the comma is left out of the one line ku. . . . written without the comma would allow for multiple reading options (which again as i see it is a good thing in haiku). i hope you dont mind me saying these things. i like what i see here and on our other blogs. way cool. aloha.

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    1. Greetings Rick! Thanks for the feed back,always good to receive comment and opinion, I’m very interested in Haiga, don’t seem to see many examples, I haven’t had a close look at yours yet, I will do.. It’s a tough call…image and text seems to please neither the poetry purists or the fine art elite, and I suppose the difficulty inherent in combining the two is probably why it’s difficult to find many examples. Still it’s good to keep playing, painting haikuing……!

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      1. yes, i understand what you mean about the “division” of words and image. what makes a purist right tho? i’ve found looking back that i have often included words in my visual work—often as elements of the visual. i think one of the reasons i like haiga is that it does have a strong tradition of combining the two (words and image) and has come into our current world (at least for me) exploding with excitement (to create). i do create with words in image in ways that are not haiga as well. i also go where i am excited—and right now that seems to be playing with haiga.

        once you start looking for haiga i suspect you will find a lot of examples. follow the links and trails of people you come across that explore “haiku and related forms”. there are a lot of ideas about haiga just like there are a lot of ideas about haiku. mine are not necessarily right or wrong or right for everyone.

        once you set out exploring haiga, as you create, i suspect you’ll develop your own ideas about what haiga is and how you want to go about it. the same is true of haiku itself. my understanding of haiku has evolved and shifted significantly in the past 5-6 years. i suspect shifts will not take you that long—i am a slow plodder. way cool on setting out on the journey regardless of where you start.

        at this point for i want to do my work the way i want to do it. others can decide what to say about it or what category it should be in later. at this point i’m fine with that. i however need to keep working. purists are fine. they can go their route if that satisfies them and excites them. cool. i’ll go my route too. most of the time i suspect there would be no new ways if we did not cross lines. and the old traditional ways. . . . most likely were new at some point and crossed lines too.

        watercolor when it first arrived 4-5 hundred years ago was not considered of value as a finished work. it was okay as a convenient way to do studies but had no other value. of course that changed. i suspect you know all about that. it’s just the way the world seems to move. i like exploring new because the new is a mark of our own time. i also like and value traditional because it has a place in where i have come from (or we as in human beings). these are important things to me. so i try to look at both and respond with that consideration in my work.

        ha. now you know i can ramble too. never mind too much about what i say. just take what works and makes sense for you (that becomes yours) and let the rest go. and of course (imo) follow what is fun and exciting for you. imo—if it’s fun and exciting, i’ll want to keep doing it. fun on that. aloha – rick

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      1. I wanted it to be a complete line, just wasn’t sure. Can’t seem to shake that English grammar..as regards the ramble..interesting. This is what I heard…Plough your own furrow and don’t worry how straight it is compared to your neighbours…something pertinent that I’m trying to train myself into…..

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      2. ha. yeah. i think you can take clues from your neighbors and what you like and use becomes yours. otherwise, yes. plow on in your own way (as i see it). if we dont push the edges how will we find what is uniquely us.

        one line ku is becoming more popular (there are even 2-line ku and 4 and sometimes 5 line ku, which may be beyond me yet). i know a number of people who explore these. i do occasionally. and yes. it is not a sentence and often does not work well as a 3-liner (as i understand it) either, however there are considerations of course.

        in case you are interested in exploring some haiku thought, i like what Jane Reichhold has to say on these forms on her Ah-Ha Poetry site here:

        http://www.ahapoetry.com

        there is a lot of info in her writings (and even lessons that help exploration). check the left hand panel articles under “Haiku” —Bare bones and Haiku How-To etc. her thinking is expressed well and makes a lot of sense. have fun exploring it.

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  2. First I love to welcome you at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai I am glad that you’ve found this haiku-family and I hope to see you often here. By the way, I am your host here.
    I think the one line haiku is awesome, but your regular haiku I can appreciate also. I am more of the three-line haiku, but all other forms are great too.

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